Composition title: Animal Concert
Keywords: Music for fifth grade primary school 450 words
Word count: 450 words composition
This article is suitable for : Fifth grade primary school
Source of the composition:
This composition is a 450-word composition about the fifth grade of primary school. The title is: "Animal Concert". Everyone is welcome to contribute. Spring is here, and the Lion King decides to hold a concert. That day, many animals came to attend the concert, including peacocks, bears and so on. When people started to be assigned, the Lion King said to the peacock: "Your tail is very beautiful, you can be a dancer." Then, the Lion King said to the Bear: "Your belly is like a big drum, so you can be the drummer." Finally, the lion king said to the giraffe: "Your neck is long and your voice can travel far. You can be the host." After the distribution was completed, the Lion King said: "The animal concert is now." Wait a moment, a little monkey said to the lion king: "There is no singer yet." The Lion King said: "I have a loud voice and I will be a singer. Do you agree?" The animals unanimously said: "Okay". In this way, the animal concert lasted all day and ended in the middle of the night. Comments from famous teachers: This essay uses an anthropomorphic writing technique, giving the animals human emotions, thinking and language, and tells the story of the animals holding a concert. This way of writing can make the content of the composition more vivid and more likely to stimulate readers' interest in reading this article. The young author first explained the Lion King's decision, then described the Lion King's division of labor, and finally explained the results of the party. The language of the composition is fluent and well organized, and the young author has strong language expression ability. If the young author can describe the wonderful performance of the party and the excitement and joy of the animals watching the party, the content of the composition will be more vivid and contagious. According to the division of labor of the Lion King, it would be more appropriate to change the title of the composition "Animal Concert" to "Animal Party".
(Xuele China Distinguished Teacher: Teacher Luo Danna) 2010-4-25 9:10:00