3, the total score writer method
Method 1: total writing → separate writing (appearance change)
Appreciate the composition: read the taste and experience the subtle paragraphs of the composition.
My mother works as a teacher in a health school. She has big bright eyes under her bushy eyebrows and a nagging mouth under her straight nose, but she has a caring heart in her chest.
Features Comments: Always write the identity of the mother first, and then write the appearance characteristics of the mother separately.
Green punch line: write a wonderful opening paragraph under the guidance of a famous teacher.
Observation and guidance: Appearance description refers to a person's appearance, clothes and expression. Posture description. We should observe carefully, strive to refine and innovate, and choose materials that express the teacher's personality and style. We should grasp their distinctive characteristics and show them through ordinary things.
Writing instruction: to describe the appearance of characters, we should grasp the characteristics and describe them in a certain order. It is necessary to grasp the essential characteristics of characters, write accurately and vividly, and let readers see their true selves. This way, the characters are vividly written.
Childlike heart and interest: the golden version of accumulating charging reading experience
Teacher Sun is the math teacher in our class. She is of medium height and looks like 35 years old. An amiable face, always so kind. The eyes seen from those black-rimmed glasses are always so bright and kind. Her language is always so profound, so wonderful and makes people laugh.
The female teacher's surname is Song. Because she is young, she is only 20 years old at most. So we all call her Miss Song, and some female students kindly call her Big Sister. Teacher Xiao Song is tall and dressed simply. There are two arch eyebrows on the face of melon seeds, a pair of bright and sharp eyes embedded under the arch eyebrows, and a glib mouth. Teacher Xiao Song tied two long ponytails and dragged them to his shoulders.
When I was in the fourth grade, a female teacher taught our class. //The female teacher's surname is Song. Because she is young, she is only 20 years old at most. So we all call her Miss Song, and some female students kindly call her Big Sister. //Teacher Xiao Song is tall and dressed simply. There are two arch eyebrows on the face of melon seeds, a pair of bright and sharp eyes embedded under the arch eyebrows, and a glib mouth. Teacher Xiao Song tied two long ponytails and dragged them to his shoulders. //
Green suggestion: re-prompting the main points of guided learning writing
1, usually observe carefully and pay attention to the characteristics of various characters. Familiarity with writing is the premise of writing well.
When describing characters, we should pay attention to their environment and their relationship. Characters live and move in society, and it is impossible to write characters without paying attention to the social environment and the relationship between characters.
Green Action: Innovative Practice and New Experience of Happy Composition
(Write the teacher's appearance) ——————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————.
(Write about Dad) ——————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————
Method 2: Total Writing → Separate Writing (change characteristics)
Appreciate the composition: read the taste and experience the subtle paragraphs of the composition.
Feng Cheng is a classmate in our class. //He is not tall, and his eyes are big and bright. In particular, he has two big ears and two thick lips, just like a big clock. To this end, the students gave him a nickname-"Big Clock". //As luck would have it, since the second grade, Feng Chenggong has kept the classroom in his class open and locked every day, just like ringing a bell. This nickname is "Open". //
Feature comments: Write the names of the characters all the time, and then introduce two features of the characters respectively.
Green punch line: write a wonderful opening paragraph under the guidance of a famous teacher.
Observation and guidance: 1, able to grasp the characteristics of characters' movements, changes in demeanor, speech and psychological activities for careful observation. 2, can observe a complete thing around the nickname characteristics of the characters. In particular, events can be observed in detail.
Writing instruction: Introduce the characteristics of the characters at the beginning. Then focus on the characteristics of the beginning, carefully select materials, and show the personality characteristics of the characters through specific examples.
Childlike heart and interest: the golden version of accumulating charging reading experience
Zhang Shan, my deskmate, is very delicate and watery, but she ended up with the nickname "Zhang Luneng".
Li became a member of the Health Committee of the "Second Bar" because she was nosy. Although she is small and short, her voice is very high. No matter who did something wrong, she will get to the bottom of it and make you apologize. Therefore, I secretly changed her name to "Mera".
The classroom stopped talking as soon as the invigilator came in. //He has a high nose, long black eyebrows, bright eyes and a thick beard under his nose, which makes people know that he is a strict invigilator. //He glanced at the classroom before he began to speak: "Classmates, it's time for you to report your primary school results to your motherland. Do the problem carefully, and don't be careless at all. After receiving the test paper, you should see the questions clearly, don't glance left and right, whisper and try to get good grades. " //
Green suggestion: re-prompting the main points of guided learning writing
1, you can observe the activities of characters with your own thoughts and feelings.
2, we should pay attention to grasp the details of the characters' movements, speeches, expression changes and psychological activities. Describe in detail the characteristics of a certain aspect of the character. Pay special attention to the nickname characteristics and spiritual quality of the characters.
Green Action: Innovative Practice and New Experience of Happy Composition
Zhang Lu is a little painter in the appearance class. ——————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————。
Dad is the master of humor in our family. ———————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————。
Method 3: Total Writing → Separate Writing (Feature Change)
Appreciate the composition: read the taste and experience the subtle paragraphs of the composition.
My father is a humorous person. //My father is short, thin, with white skin and black hair, and that curly "big wave" hairstyle. Anyone who sees it will think that he has a perm in the barber shop. His colleagues say that he is a fallen Christian, and I think so. //Artists from five provinces in Central and South China, small binding artists. His solo exhibition was well received by many celebrities. //He is a funny guy, especially fond of joking. I wonder if all artists are humorous. Anyway, I think my father is full of humor. No matter how busy and tired he was at work, as soon as he entered the house, to be exact, he said that as soon as he saw me, he immediately smiled and I danced with him.
Green punch line: write a wonderful opening paragraph under the guidance of a famous teacher.
Observation and guidance: I will observe the appearance, movements, expression changes, speech, psychological activities and other characteristics of the characters. You can observe the activities of characters with your own thoughts and feelings. When you observe, you will expand your association.
Writing guidance: When writing, you should pay attention to choosing one or two typical examples, or write from a certain angle, such as the eyes, hands and smiles of the characters, and concentrate on describing the characteristics of a certain aspect of people. This can make the characters more prominent and leave a deep impression on people. When writing a composition, you should write your own truth, your own unique language, your own unique experience and feelings. Only in this way can we write distinctive articles.
Childlike heart and interest: the golden version of accumulating charging reading experience
"Contact with the world" is my greatest hobby. //A girl of 12 years old, naughty and stubborn, with a delicate nose and a small mouth that likes to sip at ordinary times. This is me. In a corner of the bookstore, you will meet a woman who is holding a book and looking at her with relish, smiling for a while, as if she heard the cheers of the winner; Then he frowned as if he were lost in thought when he met a problem. //She, that's me, a small frequent visitor to the bookstore.
My mother especially likes reading and studying. //My mother is a farmer. She is busy all the year round and has no leisure time. //Her hands are always black and rough. //Mom is still a self-taught farmer college student. It's really amazing! //
I will draw a picture of my father. //Dad wears black-rimmed glasses on his nose. He teaches geography at school, and this pair of glasses helps him see China and the whole world. He also teaches history, and this pair of glasses helps him to see the historical figures in the book, ancient and modern, Chinese and foreign, and understand the ever-changing historical facts. Dad's glasses are really binoculars! When I painted my father's eyes, I drew a pair of big black eye frames and drew many circles on the lenses. //Dad's nose can hold up the telescope, but it's not very smart. That time, he stewed meat at home, sat the pot on the stove, and prepared for class on the table. He didn't smell the burnt meat, or I ran in from the outside and told him. Is dad's nostril small? //
Green suggestion: re-prompting the main points of guided learning writing
To write a good person and show a character's personality and ideological quality, it is necessary to write a good figure's appearance and movements. Write down the characteristics of this person's appearance and movements. This requires us to be familiar with the appearance and action characteristics of this character, and students should pay attention to strengthen observation and understanding at ordinary times. Only by careful observation can we write concretely, thoroughly and profoundly.