Hello (dear) Jim,
Thank you for your email. I'm glad to make friends with you.
In your email, you said that you wanted to know more about China and my hometown.
China is a great and beautiful country. The population is1.300 million. Beijing, the capital, will host the 2008 Olympic Games. Now many preparations have begun. Are you interested in the Olympic Games? )
In winter, Spring Festival is the most important festival in China. Everyone will get together with their families and celebrate happily.
Every summer, I go to the countryside to help my grandparents do farm work. Farming is hard, but I feel happy and rewarding when I see plants growing. )
Would you like to tell me something about your hometown? )
Looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li ping
Hello Jim: Don't use ":"at the beginning of English letters.
Please write to me as soon as possible. Imperative sentences, impolite, should be used to expect your reply. I look forward to your reply. This is an idiom. This shows the level of the questioner.
If only the original content is included, there are about 90 words, and I used about 130 words. The word 120 is a necessary condition for getting a high score. The contents in brackets are more natural to me, otherwise the whole letter will be stiff. There is no connection, coherence and proper conjunction between several points. We must add sentences and divide them into several sections.