Personality and Life (1) Shi Lei, Grade Two of the Experimental Class of Chinese Studies in the Middle School Attached to Peking University, has often seen such a scene recently: a young man with white hair, wearing knee-length shorts and thick-soled slippers, swaggering down the street, pretending to have a "personality". This does not prevent me from being a little confused. Is it that you generally wear strange clothes, people are not like people, and ghosts are not like ghosts, which is "personality"? I'm afraid not. So, what is the "individuality" advocated now, and what can be done to call it "individuality"? (2) The so-called "personality", literally, refers to the unique characteristics that are different from others. If so, the person mentioned above can really be called "personality". But obviously, his "personality" is far from what we advocate. The personality we are talking about is extraordinary, outstanding but not group; It is what Qu Yuan called "everyone is drunk and I wake up alone, and the world is cloudy and I wake up alone"; It is Ji Kang's wild and unruly; This is a secluded mountain forest in Tao Qian. In short, what we call personality is by no means unconventional in food, clothing and enjoyment, but unique in spiritual character, and its external performance is a unique life. 3 Maybe you will disagree: "Personality only affects daily words and deeds. How can it be said that its external performance is actually life? " It is true that the influence of personality is manifested in everyday words and deeds, but when you are faced with a choice, the role of personality becomes decisive enough to affect your life. Imagine, Tao Yuanming, facing the arrogant Du You, without his unyielding pride and indifferent mind, he could not resolutely resign and retire, and his life would change accordingly. It can be seen that personality is very important to life. However, although you can have a unique life with personality, who can guarantee that this life will be brilliant or bleak? What kind of personality does a brilliant life need? This is probably what people are most concerned about. To answer it, we must first look at what a brilliant life is. Some people have made great achievements in their lives; Some people are quiet and indifferent all their lives, living in seclusion in the mountains; Some people are skilled in martial arts; Some people are labeled as geniuses ... how can life be wonderful? The so-called "good, evil, beauty and ugliness are one heart", and the answer has to be found in your own heart. As long as this life conforms to its own aesthetic standards, it can be called brilliant. To do this, we must try our best to make our personality meet the requirements of "beauty" and always measure and correct it with the standard of "beauty". But more importantly, we should cultivate a correct and healthy aesthetic view, otherwise, we will not be ashamed of some bad habits, but will be proud of them, and it will be too late to regret them. Once a person has developed a good personality, he will have a brilliant life! Reference Comments: The article is well written, and expounds my own views on the relationship between "personality and life". The first paragraph shows a social phenomenon in a close-up way, that is, people already have an abdomen. Then in a skeptical tone, lead to the topic. (2) the natural paragraph, the first natural paragraph puts forward the positive and negative solutions of the problem. Explain it literally first, and then put forward the essence of "the personality we admire" Deny the so-called "personality" advertised by some people in the natural section, and clearly put forward their own argument basis and the topic of this paper: "In short, our so-called personality is by no means unconventional in food and clothing, but unique in spiritual character", "and its external performance is a unique life." At this point, the topic of "personality and life" naturally surfaced. (3) In the section of nature, it discusses why personality affects life, and proves it with Tao Yuanming, and draws the conclusion that "personality is very important to life". The natural paragraph talks about how to have a brilliant life and what kind of personality a brilliant life needs. ⑤ Paragraph is a summary paragraph. At this point, the central argument has been fully clarified. Entitled "Personality and Life", the central argument is the answer to the relationship between "personality and life": personality affects life, and cultivating a good personality will surely have a brilliant life. The discussion level of this paper is quite clear: introducing the topic → explaining the connotation of "personality" → the relationship between personality and life → a good personality determines a brilliant life. The author not only pays attention to the internal logical relationship between paragraphs, but also pays attention to the close relationship between paragraphs in language symbols. If you pay attention to the last sentence and the first sentence of each paragraph, you can prove this point; Or use rhetorical questions to make the context closely connected; Or ask questions with assumptions and follow the above; Or use the inflectional word "however" to cause the following in-depth discussion. The article has no broken lines, and the paragraphs are connected with the falcon, which is natural. British philosopher Bacon said, "Reading makes people profound and writing makes people precise". Writing is tangible thinking, while thinking is intangible. The author can arrange such a close structure, which shows that his thinking is clear and accurate. Therefore, serious writing can exercise people's thinking ability and change their thinking quality. The language is fluent and natural, revealing the aura of thought. (1) A few years ago, a book and a student were heated up. It was Han Han and his Three Doors. Although I dare not comment on how high the literary value of this book is-the evaluation of it has always been mixed-at least I have seen a novelty, a vitality, and a "modular composition" that breaks through traditional education. The most important thing is that I have seen the author's distinctive personality-no matter from the language or the story or the author's "out of line" behavior, he is flaunting his personality, a Han Han who will not be the same as others. (2) The great success of Triple Door may lie largely in its unique style with other students' works. Yu Lin Xiang may be a fictional character, but we always see the shadow of the author in him. Some are cynical, some are arrogant, some are arrogant, but some are lovely. In short, he is "different". In this crowded world, it is really not easy to do this. The rapid development of society leaves us no time to think. From the original closed, afraid of being different, to today's era of advocating individuality, it seems only a blink of an eye to conform to the requirements of this era. That's what Han Han did, so it caused a sensation. Not to mention whether there is speculation, this example fully illustrates the demand for individuality in modern society. (4) Social progress drives the progress of science and technology and living standards. Everyone is pursuing a better living environment, which makes the sense of innovation be mentioned in a very important position. At the same time, this era of information and knowledge explosion suddenly seems to have shrunk the whole world, and the contact between people has become so frequent. Modern urbanites have long been tired of closed and rigid life. What they need is freshness and diversity. It is these two points that make "publicizing individuality" the theme of this era. Every day, every moment, every place, what we want to see should be people with different personalities. Even the same thing will never be handled in two exactly the same ways. This is the proposition of this era. Of course, when a thing is mentioned so frequently, it will inevitably distort its original intention, so there are young people who make themselves "weird" in order to seek novelty, and there are also people who are willing to commit crimes in order to seek novelty. These so-called "new" have the element of "deliberately doing it". B this is not the personality reflected by the inner essence of a person we advocate. These people fall into a very stupid misunderstanding that "difference" is good, but they don't know that the difference advocated by people is a positive natural expression based on their own personality characteristics, rather than artificial modification. I like Triple Gate, because I appreciate the author's fearless personality. This natural expression makes me feel a real and energetic young man, a unique person in the world even if he is not perfect. I don't want to be a fixed machine manipulated by others. A fresh person always has his unique side. What are you hesitating about? Liberate your personality and become a part of this colorful world. Reference comment: The idea of this article is that "publicizing individuality is the need of the times". The full text takes the phenomenon of Han Han, which has been concerned by the society, especially the majority of middle school students, as an example to discuss. When analyzing the social reasons why Han Han and his "Triple Door" were heated up, the author directly integrated his own feelings and experiences, such as the reading of natural paragraphs: although I dare not comment on how high the literary value of this book is ... at least I saw a novelty and vitality from the book. The author's analysis is reasonable, which makes the analysis of nature rebate point to the central point of the article: the development of the times needs freshness and difference, and the times need the publicity of individuality. Han Han and his Triple Door adapted to the needs of the times. ⑤ The natural paragraph is actually a supplement, which reflects the author's concern about the multifaceted nature of things and his more detailed thinking. When we emphasize one aspect of things, we don't ignore the other. This supplement prevents the deviation of reasoning. The difference between this article and the example (1) is that the author "I" directly stands up to face the reality and the object she wants to talk about. (6) I like Triple Door because I appreciate the author's fearless personality ... "You can see the author's clear attitude towards personality. However, the article also has some shortcomings. The third paragraph should be the main body of the discussion, which is about the demand for individuality in modern society. The analysis of these two paragraphs only stays on the novelty and different needs of modern urbanites, but why? Why something new and different is the need of the times, the author has not discussed it. In other words, just talking about this and why this is a deeper discussion remains to be discussed. There is also the analysis in paragraph (5), and the reason is not clear. Generally speaking, the language expression is fluent, which shows that the author has clear thinking and certain expressive ability. But some statements in some places need to be revised. For example, the words "characters in the book" or "from the triple gate" should be added before the sentence "Lin Yuxiang" in the natural paragraph, because not all readers have read the triple gate. Without explanation, readers will ask, "Who is Lin Yuxiang? "(5) The B sentence in the natural paragraph is not fluent and the meaning is not clear. The suggestion should be changed to: "This is not the personality we advocate, and these people's foolish tastes make them fall into the misunderstanding of personality." Language is thought, and unclear expression of language will lead to unclear expression of thought. Example (3) Personality, Innovation and Progress Song Hao, Grade Two of the Science Experimental Class of the Middle School Attached to Peking University (1) I remember watching a young singer's TV Grand Prix live broadcast, and I saw this thing: Many people asked a judge why many players were given low marks. The judge replied: In the past, when I heard some famous singers singing, I knew it was Guo or Li Guyi. They all have distinct personalities. Listening to these players sing, the sound quality and singing method are the same, which is boring. In my opinion, this exposes a major problem in the current society: "over-standardized" education obliterates people's personality. Einstein, a master of physics, once said: Imagination is more important than knowledge, because imagination is the source of all knowledge. If we go further, where does imagination and creativity come from? Then the answer must be that a person's imagination comes from his personality to a great extent. Only when a person has a strong personality can he jump out of the bondage of convention, get unique and novel ideas and make amazing creations. Just think, how can a society where everyone sticks to the rules, has no personality and is lifeless produce amazing creation and sustainable development? Such a society will only wander on the old road that has experienced hundreds of millions of times and go to extinction in an endless cycle. In fact, Einstein's own experience is enough to prove this point: his theory of bringing great progress to mankind was obtained by breaking through the ordinary concept of time and space with great personality courage. We certainly don't want our society to fall into a dead silence, but the grim reality is before us. Everyone may have seen this story: when faced with a circle on the blackboard, kindergarten children show amazing imagination, middle school students show a "rigorous" attitude to find "standard" answers, while those who have already embarked on their jobs show no independent thinking and rigid obedience. This is a complete portrait of the whole process of fanatical pursuit of "standardized" education to obliterate people's personality! In a serious campus, students' thoughts full of individuality are labeled as "wishful thinking" again and again. Finally, students become standard products, and graduation certificates are qualification certificates. In this way, how can people's personality not be obliterated, and where will the innovative ability to promote social progress come from? (5) Do we really wait until one day, when everyone becomes a clever machine, and human beings lose their last advantage compared with computers-personality and creativity, so that they are completely enslaved by machines, can we wake up? Reference comment: As can be seen from the title, this paper is to explain the relationship between personality, innovation and progress. The example given at the beginning is familiar to everyone in real life and targeted. The second paragraph closely follows the topic of "standardized education obliterates people's personality" and expounds my point of view with negative criticism. ③ The two natural paragraphs illustrate the relationship between personality and creation and progress from both positive and negative aspects. At the end, rhetorical questions are used to warn people. Although the article is clear in thinking and convincing in truth, the materials are not rich enough and the truth is still thin. In some places, language expression is too arbitrary and lacks objectivity. For example, in the fourth paragraph, "In a serious campus, students' thoughts full of individuality are labeled as' wishful thinking' again and again. Finally, students become standardized products. "I think this statement is not in line with the reality of school education. Maybe some schools are like this, so it should be clear that this arbitrary conclusion of replacing the face with points and generalizing everything with points is unacceptable.

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